Left-branching example of the week

A left-branching sentence is one in which the subject and verb do not appear until the sentence has wandered around for quite some time:

“Only offering height modifications in certain areas, explicitly describing what the city wants buildings to look like in [City] Junction and charging non-residential developments a fee to pay for affordable housing are three ideas [City] planners may implement this spring…”

The subject and verb of this sentence is “…three ideas [city] planners may implement this spring,” but we must read read 32 words before we can know what this sentence is all about.

We could right-branch this sentence this way:

[City] planners may implement the following three ideas this spring:

  • Only offering height modifications in certain areas
  • Explicitly describing what the city wants buildings to look like in [City] Junction
  • Charging non-residential developments a fee to pay for affordable housing

This revision also breaks out the long series items into a bulleted list, which makes the sentence easier to scan and comprehend. No extra charge!

We should always strive to make it easier for our audiences to read our sentences.

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